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Re: a poem written with a dying pen and a thriving love
Hey babe. I'm here to rip you to shreds, like requested ;). Okay so you know how much I like your poetry. I think it's great. And I can see ...
May 2, 2014 -
Re: for her
I absolutely loved this poem, let me just say that before I get to critiquing it. It flowed beautifully and I can already see an improvement from you since the ...
Apr 28, 2014 -
Re: Deleted 38
hey darling. Here to review this beautiful piece you have given us. First off, you know what a fan I am of your poetry. like omg fan. But there are ...
Apr 27, 2014 -
Re: She Will Be Judged; Chapter 5
Okay, hi there! Since this is chapter five, I'm just going to comment on general errors I'm seeing here. :) faeces feces, dear. in the mid-seventies. Maria had never been ...
Apr 27, 2014 -
Re: Abortion
Don't worry, we've all (or at least, I have) posted controversial pieces. I think where you slipped up was a. posting it without really working on it, so it's very ...
Jan 28, 2014 -
Re: wishbones & breadfruit
Hey love! I saw your wallpost and figured I'd give it a go :) I personally love your writing style. It's very melodic and fairy like. Fairy like in you ...
Nov 24, 2013 -
Re: Percy Jackson and the last Olympian
Hey Deanie! :) I saw this, and knew I had to review it, because Percy Jackson is one of my favorite things. I've actually never reviewed an essay before, so ...
Nov 24, 2013 -
Re: Hollow
Hello there, here to review you :3 I actually really like what you've done with this poem. At first I was reading it and thinking about how it needed more ...
Nov 20, 2013 -
Re: Generation
Hello! Here to review you. But first off, let me link you to the topic that shows you how to format your poetry using YWS' new system of submission- This ...
Nov 20, 2013 -
Re: I'm Sorry
Hi :) Spark here to review. First off, your grammar is all over the place . Literally. And I'm not going to fix it for you, because you need to ...
Nov 13, 2013 -
Re: Why?
Hey! Spark here to review you :3 Okay so this is very cliche. There's no pretty imagery, no metaphors. You just tell us straight up what's going on, which makes ...
Nov 12, 2013 -
Re: short poems
Hi nite! Here to review your poems. I actually don't think I've ever reviewed you, so this'll be something new! We'll start with the first one. I absolutely love the ...
Nov 11, 2013 -
Re: when she takes my pulse she has to listen for a whisper
Hey love. I was looking for something to review, and I stumbled upon this lovely gem. Like Audie, I have nothing technicality wise to offer you. It's polished and clean, ...
Nov 7, 2013 -
Re: Twin Studies
Hi love. Here to review you :3 Telepathic, psychically in-sync. Hmm.. Even though they mean different things, one can be said without needing to say the other. Otherwise, it gets ...
Nov 1, 2013 -
Re: Prologue of The USA Abattoir
Hello darling! I'm Spark, here to review you! First of all, welcome to YWS! I hope you're settling in nicely :3 I noticed to things when I first read over ...
Oct 27, 2013
