Kaylyn

Ok, very good. Here are a few things: Grammar: "Or maybe a word, near and dear to me" "Let it sing, like a midsummer lark" "Bring this masterpiece into the ...

Hello! I'll be doing a review of your poetry. Here are a few things: Grammar: Well now, Isn't this awkward Im here [Should be I'm] Right now With nothing to ...

Ok, first things first: Grammar: Found a few mistakes upon glancing through this. "I woke up in my room , trying to catch my breath"- Spacing issue between room and ...

Very good, very good! I really like this. However, just a few things: Grammar: Great job! I didn't see any spelling errors. Maybe add comma after bright and light. Flow: ...

Ok, so here are a few things to work on: Grammar: Try fixing the typos, they have already been stated so I won't go over them again and beat a ...

Here are a few things: First and foremost-Break this up into stanzas. This will make it a little more organized and easier for your reader to follow the poem. Also, ...

I love how the opening line hooks the reader in. However, I think that this is the only line that should be used in second person. After the opening line ...

Very interesting. I love your writing style, it's very intriguing. The only thing that I would recommend is more background maybe as to why this character was fired and why ...

I see that you are new to YWS, so welcome! Ok, here are just a few things: Hear the roar; [The ; is not needed here, just use a comma] ...

So, sorry its taken a little longer than I thought I would to get to your poem (finals week happened). Very nice for a first shot at a love poem. ...

OK so just a few issues: On the contrary, I think that this story is not quite long enough. I'd like to see more character development at this point. I'd ...

First some technical things. I noticed that your poem wasn't broken into stanzas. I didn't know if this was because when you post it lumped it together, or if you ...

Here are some technical things: Wind whistling through the trees [Add period] being outside is the bee's knees [This doesn't exactly make any sense/Add period] Animals are scurrying [Add comma] ...

Ah, I wasn't disappointed. A great chapter once again. Technical things: "It's in the bin." Sherlock said. Pretty sure it's: "It's in the bin," Sherlock said. Just putting that comma ...

First some technical things: "I solve that." Should be I solved that. "I didn't see your name in the article." Joanne added Should be: "I didn't see your name in ...