Kate98

Hello! Happy Review Day! I am glad to see that you have posted your first piece. I know that takes some courage. While I do not have much experience with ...

Hi! The premise of this story is great and I cannot wait to see where this is going. First off I have a few general/plot suggestions. I would consider changing ...

Hi!! This is a pretty whitty description of summer. It is kind of funny how excited we get on the first even remotely warm day. I have to admit to ...

Hi! I really enjoyed this chapter. The plot seems to finally be picking up. I really like how developed Asenath (which you must tell me how to pronounce tonight) is ...

HAPPY REVIEW DAY!!! This poem was very emotional. You did a nice job expressing yourself. I am glad you put punctuation in it. Many people do not and it actually ...

This poem is great! I realize you are trying to add emphasis is the word 'Our', but I would capitalize 'house' and 'home' in addition/instead of 'our' to show the ...

I really like this poem. The only thing I would change is the capitalization. Artistically I would capitalize the last line to show contrast and emphasize it. You could also ...

Happy Review Day! I like how you combined the concrete fact (science) with the fluid creativity (poetry). This has already been pointed out, but I think your last full stanza ...

Hi. I would like to commend you for using punctuation in a poem. Some people seem to forget to do this, but this is about your poem so i will ...

Ok so I think you probably had a good vision for how you wanted this to go, but it became very unclear once you started writing it. There are many ...

This made me laugh. I like the use of the word "for" over and over again. It was a little odd, but I think it added to the humor over ...

Hi! This is a great poem. It grabbed my attention right away. You described the emotions very well. The only thing I really noticed is you may want to add ...