Kamas

I'm not sure what you're trying to get across here. As well as your lack of structure seems distracting. As Aussie said, show don't tell. So she wears jean, a ...

I really love how you have these motivations behind this poems that you write, it's very sweet and I think you deserve a tip of the hat for it. It's ...

I must say, I quite enjoyed this. Your ability to create imagery is great and obvious. The one things that I see as a big problem is that you turned ...

Hey Neverending. You lack some reviews so I'll give you a hand ^^ My biggest problem here is the rhyming, I have a dislike for rhyming. It cuts off so ...

I repeat what Snoink said too. You are telling us what the storm can't do, staying in the negative state gets boring. Much too boring :wink: Also, by telling us ...

Hi Kat! Kamas here. Unfortunately, your poem is a weaving of cliched line after cliched line. I hate to be harsh, but it's the truth, all these lines are nothing ...

Hello! Just a quick run through for you before I hit the sack. If anyone had read any other of my storys, you will find the story "The Missing." The ...

Okay, as requested Ed. I'm going to back Galerius with this one. You have a bad habit with the use of ellipsis, and it's one you should get rid of. ...

Hi geebee! Kamas here to review, but I'm going ask something quick of you. Can you please review a few works before you post a piece? It's the courtesy policy ...

Kylan, now that I've read this. I'm just, :shock: Ask chat, first comment after I was done was 'Holy sweet mother jesus." It was horribly graphic and beautiful, sends shivers ...

Hi Makar! Now sadness, is a theme everyone explores at sometime. Even I wrote a poem about sadness and well I was happy with it. xD First thing, your spacing ...

Oo-ers! French! :D Well, I think I can give you a little hand with the rhyme here since French is my native language. Now, I think that you may lack ...

Hey Miral! I, like Juniper, find the way you knit your words together appealing. But anyways! To expand on what was mentioned above, I think an extended metaphor would really ...

So sorry Jigs :( I meant to get here sooner, I really did. Now you got a lot of great reviews so I'll be ignoring those and just telling you ...

Hi Olya! A quick two cents before I head off to bed. Now your language is nice, but its in paragraph form! That's no good, as a poem it should ...