Hi there, captain.classy. I'm Conrad Rice, and I'll be your reviewer for today.
So, I really think that you need to follow the old "Show, don't tell" adage here. You're telling us all about this storm and frankly, it's not doing anything for me. If you would describe its actions, how it touches the people that are affected by it, then I think this would be a much better work.
It has potential, don't get me wrong. You just need to work with it to bring that out. Send me a PM if you have any questions or comments about it.
Good job, and good luck.
-Conrad Rice
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