Junel

Hey, I'm loving the story so far. Hmm.. interesting that it only affects the y chromosome. Can we trust these new characters. This chapter was really good. It was a ...

Hey, it's becoming even more interesting. Grammatical Etc. errors: I read over this twice and as far as I could tell there were none. Characters: We learned a little more ...

Hey, this is really nice. Grammatical Etc. errors: Are studying for that There should be you in between are and studying. I would any reason There should be have in ...

Hey, I love it. Grammatical Etc. errors: gold ichor our down I am guessing this is a typo and you meant to say pour. every follow your Again a little ...

Hey, this is really nice. Grammatical Etc. errors: The blood covered ground. So you use this sentence twice in one paragraph which is fine, but maybe try to use something ...

Hey, I love this. It's really cool. Grammatical Errors etc. crystal, dripped It might be just me, but this sounds a little choppy. try getting rid of the comma and ...

Hey, again beautifully done, I love it. Grammatical Errors Etc. orange from just rising in the early This sounds a little funny and it might be better if you just ...

Hey, this is a actually really well one even if you were twelve at the time. I'm not going to go over the grammatical errors I found because you making ...

Hey. great job! This is really good. Your characters are very well developed and described. Th plot is interesting and makes sense for the reader. Your descriptions are well written ...

Well presented! I could fell the irony and hope to see lots of more of your works. Your overall theme is very interesting and well showed. There are some points ...

Hey, this is extremely interesting and I can't wait to read more. Grammar, Punctuation, Spelling As the moon was shine across This is a little confusing instead of was you ...

Hey, this is so interesting! So some advice yay! One thing you could do is elongate the whole flashback. I liked it, but it was just so short. You could ...

Hey, good job! I love the message you have and your word chose is also really great. You gave no grammatical errors that I saw either. The main problem with ...

Hey, this is a really nice poem. First off the negative: Only thing I saw was two point when your rhyme scheme was slightly messed up So its not that ...

Hey, this is lovely Ok, so only thing I saw grammatically is record for the death. so I believe you meant to say deaf because otherwise this is a little ...