Jonathan

Thanks I think you are right about that and I also think that my chapter 1 is not so good but chapter two is much better I think.

OK I think you need to make your thing biger.

Very nice I like the piece at the end.

Nice.

Thanks. :D

Thanks Renee. There is something that I wanted to tell you about it is a order of knights called the knights of the green room there is only one more ...

This review is almost as big as a short story o . o O

Hello this is kind of strange. ~Jon~ :pirate3:

Just a little hint you should try to make it bigger.

Nice work. ~Jon~ :pirate3:

I really liked this. ~Jon~ :pirate3:

I don't have time to do a review but you need to make your 4th paragraph smaller. ~Jon~

Nice work. :D

Sorry about the repeat.

I don't really have time for a review but just saying you need to make this paragraph smaller. ~Jon~ :D