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Re: The Blind Side
Hello here is a jordin with a little review I hope it helps some. :D OK how can the stars be covered by dogs? :? Sorry but this is making ...
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Re: Pride Of Mine
Hello here I am jordin for a review for you I really hope it helps you out some. first of I am not quit sure what is wrong with your ...
Apr 1, 2013 -
Re: The covered ground of deceased~
I think that this kind of story would sound better in pas tens instead of present. How would they have ALL risked there lives for her is she a princes ...
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Re: Weasel Away My Heart
Hello Aley a Jordin here for a review I hope that it helps you some. I am not quit sure that TOE is the right word to use up there ...
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Re: Silence
Hello Clarity here I am for a little review that I really hope helps you.:) OK your poetry is okay by my standards although I am really not the person ...
Apr 1, 2013 -
Re: Well, This is Awkward: Loud Singing
Hello here I am for a little review. :D OK now personally you did really well about some mystery at the end but something that i noticed in particularly was ...
Apr 1, 2013 -
Re: Life's Hell.
Hello Toe I am here for a kind of reviewish thing that needs to be writ well here goes. Your rimes are awesome and your spelling is really good to ...
Mar 31, 2013 -
Re: The Three Vengeful Dwarves
(The winter moon) might be better up there. I am not sure that (twig) should be used up there maybe just (branch) the hmm maybe a would be better it ...
Mar 31, 2013 -
Re: Runaway (Chapter 1)
Hello here I am for a little review hope it helps. :D The first paragraph and eighth paragraph is to big to. ("Nichole, get down here now!" screamed Nichole's mother, ...
Mar 31, 2013 -
Re: The Journals of Maynard Ray: The 144 Heavens
Know how could there be more than one heaven I have read a good deal of the bible maybe heaven is mentioned 144 times but not exactly that there 144 ...
Mar 31, 2013 -
Re: Esc (750 word)
OK here I am for a review on this chapter book thing so far it is really good but the first thing I noticed was that you are putting way ...
Mar 31, 2013 -
Re: Chronical Adventure: Setting and Details
OK here I am to try to help if I can. :D This makes absolutely no sense at all here its like you wrote a huge book and then wrote ...
Mar 31, 2013 -
Re: A Call To Arms
Hello Orel here I am for something for you. :D First of you really need to write some more to your book and second I cant see anything here at ...
Mar 31, 2013 -
Re: Through the Portal
Hellos well as you can guess here I am for review day with a review for you I really hope that it helps you out some. :D Sorry but this ...
Mar 31, 2013 -
Re: The Spark
Here I am to help you I hope with a review it might be good and it might not but still I hope it helps you out some and this ...
Mar 31, 2013