JemimaPuddleDuck

Oh! This is just about the funniest thing I've ever read :-) In a kind way of course :-) I think that for the purposes of this particular competition it ...

Hi! I am used to writing poetry, and so don't very often critique this sort of thing - sorry if it's not helpful! First the grammatical stuff: (in bold) Princess ...

I really loved this and I'm sorry that all I have to offer you is one of those annoying posts that have no suggestion as to how you could improve. ...

Oh, this is so sad! It's lovely - but sad!! Ok, I think it starts off well - Alone in this room, That's full of people. This is a very ...

Ok. All I can say is to read some poetry! This might be useful to you :-) Hope I was of some use to you!

Hi! I understand the message that you are trying to convey in this piece, but I have a few problems with it: Firstly you are over forcing a rhyme. You ...

ok. I thought that this was lovely! It really is wonderful. The only things I could find were tiny tiny things to do with grammar (shown below). I also changed ...

ok. I understand your message that you wanted to put across, but this should be done using imagery and metaphors - not just telling us. try to make it more ...

This was lovely - so sad and heartfelt! You had all of the emotion, but perhaps were unable to show it through your writing in places. This is good though ...

ok - I apologise in advance but my way of reviewing things is to just re-write them. It's the easiest way to demonstrate my ideas. So here goes... a bridge ...

I tend just to re-write people's poetry, as i'm not so good at telling what I mean, so instead I show it. At the end, I know you meant to ...

well what outstandingly splendid creations are these! :-) but I would like to add that you missed off an important one, which althougth was not composed on the M25, deserves ...

The sunset drips over the hill; A blaze of red, orange and pink, I think this is a lovely way to begin a poem, and this is the type of ...

i do like it a lot - but I think, without being too irritating, that when you are trying desperately to find exactly the right words for an idea (and ...

I'm not so good at reviews because i hate to say anything against what people have done - i know how attached you get to what you've written! But here ...