Incandescence

Moved.

Trident-- I commend you for trudging through this. I suppose this can be thought of as a very long character sketch--the plot becomes more apparent after Nightlife. It isn't an ...

Krystalstars-- The narrator is self-obsessed and boring. I doubt if a revision that does not include starting over will be worthwhile. Take some time. Step away from writing and read. ...

Fantasyfreak14-- Welcome to the YWS Poetry forums. This curious construction serves no purpose that I can see. Best, Brad

Fantasy of You-- I appreciate the honesty. As it were, being published in a magazine doesn't mean anything, since three-fourths of the users on the site could be published in ...

avidreader10-- Thanks for taking the time to read and respond. It is a short story. Jack, I am surprised this received any positive feedback. Besides being written in a slightly ...

watergirlwriter3-- Please refrain from posting any more poetry until you have reviewed three or four pieces by other users. Thanks, Brad

Hi Soldier boy jack, Not much here to get excited about. "girl in the coffin"? Yuck. This reads like an attempt for pity. For me it was instantly forgettable. Best, ...

Dear Chantel: Don't get offended. Don't compain. Re: "Wow. So much negative feedback. I can't help feeling that these comments are a personal attack on me. I don't get offended ...

Elizabeth, The freaking injustice of love is plain to any sentient being. The problem with this poem is that it beats the reader over the head with it. There's no ...

carelessaussie13, Is this a poem or a dialogue, and what did you think would be of interest to a reader? I see nothing here worth taking the time to revise. ...

Wiggy-- (A return to this...) Did you consider this without the last strophe? In my first analysis, I felt like the third stanza was the problem; now I think cutting ...

trident-- I appreciate the effort you took to read and respond. My first thought is that if you haven't already read the rest of this story, it probably coagulates in ...

awsomewritter123-- Pay better attention in your ESL classes: get a working vocabulary, read some things about poetry (I can think of at least five posted in the Writing Tips section), ...

Tropicana, Issues with reviewers should usually be taken up through PMs, but I will respond here this once. I think I gave the piece the respect it deserved. At a ...