Incandescence

Nightfall-- The distinction Snoink suggested between poetry for itself and poetry for fiction is crucial here. As a poem for itself, this is nothing new or exciting--in fact, it bears ...

moon14, This is truly dreadful. Poetry has a vast arsenal of techniques within reach, and yet your attempt only exhibits the ability to hit the enter key (and the ever-promising ...

SASSYLADY333, This is amateur poetry at its worst and shot through with spelling and grammar mistakes--could you at least make a pretense as to your commitment to the craft? Execrable ...

irishnavygirl, This is not what I would call poetry. It's a collection of sentences about to bust at the seams from all the prepositional clauses that ultimately go nowhere. Lines ...

EmoGurl, First, the poem--if you truly thought art was all about you with no consideration for your audience, why on earth did you feel the need to share this? Art ...

Matt, Consider as a starting point for future versions: Standing on a ledge, and below, photographers and reporters flash, and oh, the wind - I just want some fresh air. ...

busboys and poets. This is fine, thought-provoking work. I saw it as an illustration of the links between reality, portrayal and perception. Cade's comment reflecting on music was one direction ...

HelpSOS, It's hard to take a message seriously when it isn't even spelled correctly. It's "Neuter"--not "Nueter." Political poetry almost always fails because the two things, politics and poetry, when

writer_chick_13, Had you actually personified the horrific rape and murder, or presented in a unique viewpoint, then there might be something to re-examine here. But for the most part, this ...

jesslieeboo-- The poem posed as letter isn't anything new, and your attempt certainly doesn't breathe life into the dead horse. What you should aim to do in future attempts consists ...

omgafilangi-- How nice, a formulaic poem about reaching zen. First of all, I want to mention the nature of the language in this piece: the vast majority reads exactly as ...

xhalcyonx128-- I see no substantial improvement with the changes you made. The problem still remains that there is not one thing remotely 'poetic' about this: it's prose broken into uneven ...

OverEasy, What is this, anyway? It seems like a monologue with so much boring and tired descriptions as to render the whole thing useless. The descriptions the N gives of ...

NocturnalSupremacy92-- Bad ideas: 1. Rhyming incorrectly. 2. The unspecified wanting/hope/desire in S2. 3. All of S3 and S4. 4. Repeating the first line at the end. Good ideas: 1. Forget ...

PenguinAttack-- From the bottom... I see no purpose in beating your readers over the head with the fact that you're human in S4. The title does a decent job. As ...