Incandescence

Thanks for all the responses, guys! In part, I suppose, the poem's aim was to somehow (innocuously) reveal the acknowledgment of its own existence; that is to say, it is ...

Re: autopsy. For: faith I have been to autopsies, and they are pretty horrible to witness by a non-professional. Having said that, I do not think this is really a ...

The title is quite appropriate: it's a reference to Antigone. As for the rest of your comments, gracias. The effect of that "displaced" part was strictly to displace the reader, ...

Re. Unreciprocated. For: Halloween You need to be careful with rhetoric: there is a time and a place for 'you', but it is not everywhere. This poem, by directing itself ...

FOR: Jack I'm both drawn to and repelled by this piece. The language is intoxicating, but the point is nauseating, and I found myself falling to sleep in mid-sentence. You've ...

So? ... What do you want me , the reader, to do? Hate him? Have pity for him? Because I don't -- your words were not descriptive enough, which, I ...

Sorry Cal, but this isn't happenin'. Esoteric images, each faintly connected, does not constitute the measure of a poem. You have some ideas here that I've seen in your other ...

Your too loose with your language; something to be expected of longer poems, but, nevertheless, something to still guard against. So trim the poem up and get more precise; also, ...

FOR: xanthan gum First, I'm glad you liked it; second, I'm not surprised the point wasn't conveyed in a very clear, precise manner. Something I'm beginning to take notice of ...

My best guess is that this is a poem about an illicit liaison, that that's why one of the lovers has so much attention on the ring, which is presumably ...

Thanks Misty. It's the steep river of everlasting jets...that's everlasting. Somehow I don't guess that's going to clarify anything. I very much appreciate your comments. I frequently sink with the ...

(I love the irony between the topic of the poem v. the topic of discussion) Right, and, because your question was not, in any sense, sarcastic to the point of ...

Jack, There is some good imagery in places within this poem, but for me it somehow lacks that tension, the tautness, that is necessary to hold the piece together and ...

I'm not quite sure why you had some of the confusion you did, so I apologize in not being able to address them, other than to say 'pay attention to ...

I've got some kind of Gregorian chant in the background at the moment, so I'm more sympathetic to this piece than I might be otherwise. But that may be the ...