Thank you, Brad, for a good and honest critique. I really appreciate it.
My best guess is that this is a poem about an illicit liaison, that that's why one of the lovers has so much attention on the ring, which is presumably a token of a relationship with the person who's coming in the front door at the end.
Correct. A woman and her lover - with her husband returning home.
Do you mean "curve of your hips," or is that a typo for "curve of your lips"?
It's curve of the hips - it's more sensual.
I'll work on the revamp, making it clearer, etc. and post it when finished.
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