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Idraax

  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Meaningless

    This is nice. I like your imagery here and could see them in my head. Is the lack of capitalization a stylistic choice? The one thing I had a compliant ...

    Nov 3, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Alien Rooms

    I like the rhythm in this. It had a very nice flow. It made me want to say it aloud, but as it's 2:30 a.m here, that would be a ...

    Oct 22, 2011
  • Lyrics » General, General Re: Let Go

    I like this! I'm a little confused by what's going on though. I get the sense that something happened to their relationship, but I can't tell what happened. I do ...

    Sep 29, 2011
  • Lyrics » General, General Re: Invade My Heart

    I like it. Just watch out for typo's. I think there might be one on the very last line. I'm glad you remembered to have proper punctuation in your poem, ...

    Sep 25, 2011
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Farm

    This is nice. I like the imagery and the rhyming. I especially liked the fact that you had proper punctuation. My only complaint is that it doesn't look that good. ...

    Sep 20, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Canoe Tritina

    I like your poem. Unfortunately, I don't know anything about the style, but I did like the imagery you used. Your descriptions made me feel as if I was doing ...

    Aug 28, 2011
  • Short Story » General, General Re: A Life All My Own

    I liked this. You really make the character come alive. However, I noticed some minor problems with your piece. (See below) It's my day, my time. Standing in front of ...

    Aug 7, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: whimsy

    I like it! One thing. To me it seems like one giant sentence. What happened to the commas and the period? Was that intentional not to have them? I loved ...

    Mar 27, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » Science Fiction, General Re: Delusion

    This is interesting Jasmine. But I was a little confused about this wording. She was tired, her body still weak from Pennsylvania, her head aching from where it slammed against ...

    Mar 27, 2011
  • Short Story » General, General Re: dismantle the sun [1]

    I like this. It has a nice rhythm to it and it sorta reminded me of The Giver for some reason. One thing though, I couldn't really get a sense ...

    Mar 27, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Fallout

    I love this imagery. I'm glad you used proper punctuation in your poem, not many people do. I am confused as to what the poem is meant to be talking ...

    Mar 27, 2011
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Balloon

    This is poetic. I like the format of the poem. I think it works for the poem. There were two things that I didn't understand though. I still get butterflies ...

    Mar 27, 2011
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Favorites Hurt

    This was an interesting poem. One thing though. It's not one large sentence. Please, put periods at the end of your sentences. Poems are just like prose; they need punctuation ...

    Mar 27, 2011
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: The Hills Song

    It rhymes! This was a nice, short, poem. Now I am wondering what happened to the speaker. This 'cause now my knee kills. sounded a little odd to me though. ...

    Mar 27, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Deserted

    I like the fact that you used proper punctuation in your poem. Not many people seem to be doing that...Good job. However, I do not like this part though. runs ...

    Mar 27, 2011


Every really new idea looks crazy at first.
— Alfred North Whitehead