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Re: What If....
Hello, I'm Howl. I think that your second line would be better if you used was instead of were. I also think that in line six could is better than ...
Oct 19, 2014 -
Re: Shattered soul
Hi, I'm Howl. I know how all this feels, cause I've been through it. I'm still going through it but if it means anything to you, I'm hear if you ...
Sep 30, 2014 -
Re: Dragons
Hello, I'm Howl. I love the idea of this poem, but I really think that if you added more to it then it would be even better than it already ...
Sep 24, 2014 -
Re: iii. eight-7
Hey, I'm Howl. This was truly a beautiful piece. I feel like I can relate in a way. I loved how I could picture it. I do have one question ...
Sep 13, 2014 -
Re: Jason
Hello, I'm Howl. I think I see where this story is going and I do like the idea of it, but it could be better if you could add more ...
Aug 21, 2014 -
Re: I Want To Know Too
Hello, I'm Howl. All I can really say is wow. This was amazing how you made the kid so innocent, but it is truly sad to picture. Your description was ...
Aug 11, 2014 -
Re: Broken into Fragments
Hello, I'm Howl. I see where this poem is going but I think that you could add more to it, like add more details, some lines seem like they would ...
Aug 11, 2014 -
Re: Natural Hazards
Hello, I'm Howl. This was actually really clever, the way you brought in the hurricane idea was great, though, I don't think that the word serendipity should be used in ...
Aug 11, 2014 -
Re: Suicide
I understand where you are coming from, and I did like this piece. It's a start for letting people know how suicidal people think, which would change a lot of ...
Aug 4, 2014 -
Re: The Sky-Girl
This story was really in my opinion. I do think that maybe instead the title should be the 'The Sky Princess' instead of the "The Sky Girl", but that is ...
Aug 4, 2014 -
Re: Royal Injustice
This is a really good poem that seems well thought out. I do have one thing that I don't really like; "Heads would roll like chicken" it doesn't fit with ...
Aug 4, 2014 -
Re: discomposure
To me this is a good poem, the way your words actually created images that I could picture inside of my head. The way your words described the feelings that ...
Aug 4, 2014 -
Re: If Beds Could Talk
Hi, I'm Howl. This was a really good poem, though I don't really get the part "The matress springs of moon-lit beams". Could you explain the moon-lit beams part to ...
Aug 4, 2014 -
Re: Our Goodbye
Hello, I'm Howl. This is a good poem with just a few errors. In stanza 1 "You left me helpless and my heart, since then, remained empty." I think that ...
Aug 3, 2014 -
Re: I'm sorry
Hello, I'm Howl The poem in all was really nice, but there are a few things that don't seem right. When you say: "All things must come to an end, ...
Aug 3, 2014
