Horisun

I love this poem. The rhymes are great, and the theme is AMAZING! I'm still a kid myself, but I still love this poem. There was pretty much only one ...

Like Gnomish said, not too much to say about this one. Mostly, it was grammar errors, such as, in the entire conversation between them and the girls, there were no ...

This is a great poem! It has a nice flow, and I like the emotional value in it. There are just two things I'd like to point out. First of ...

This poem is darker than I expected... It's sad, and very well done. However, there are two things I'd like to point out. First, You used sleeping in two different ...

It's Horisun, here to review! First off, this was a really good story, and I liked how it was told. But there were a few confusing things in it for ...

Great chapter! Okie, so, I was actually surprised when I saw this, because for some reason, I thought it ended with the first chapter. Not that I'm complaining, this was ...

I enjoyed this story. I didn't realize that it was a parody of Alice and the Wonderland at first. But once I did, I truly appreciated the way you told ...

This is a really great poem! I really enjoyed it. I think the lyrics do not need to be changed, because they're really good as they are, however, I noticed ...

Oh, wow... I didn't expect that. First, if this has some deep meaning, I'm sorry about your Grandpa, if it's just a poem, good poem. So, at the beginning, you ...

Yay! New chapter! I love, love, love this series. These characters are AMAZING! :D There wasn't much to dislike about this chapter, I love the description, I love Con, I ...

Great chapter! (Or day, depending on how you look at it) Nothing much to say, except for the line, ""Good morning" Louis yawned. He had been dragged out of bed ...

Yay! New chapter! Love, love, love it! Two things, "scramble your brains" should be "scramble your brain" also, I wish a bit more happened in this chapter. You know me, ...

Hello! I'm here for a review! Overall, this is a very good chapter. I like the dialogue and description. However, it feels like more of a prologue than a chapter, ...

Hi there, Liberty500! Nice short story! There isn't much I'd like to point out, other then When she said, "She's just a divorced mother now who works in the library" ...

Okay, dark first chapter... But alright, let's just do the review. I actually think you don't need to change much here story wise, other than I feel like you're kind ...