Hello,
This is really well written! I could feel emotion coming from each line, and you also used good imagery so that I could picture the whole scene in my mind. I thought the way you structured this was also really well done. In the first few stanzas, the lines show the scene being normal, and then you use single word lines in the scene of the battle to show more effect.
Because moments like these make us
Stronger towards the cause we’re
Fighting for.
I really like these lines you ended off with to show how this battle isn't the end. This incident will just make these people stronger to fight back.
Overall, this is really well done and I hope to read more work from you!
Keep Writing.
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