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  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Dramatic Re: Forbidden: Prologue

    I like this. Your question instantly made me question what I knew about power. I like the way you did this because I use this same method when I write. ...

    Aug 1, 2016
  • Poetry » General, General Re: The Night Sleep is Late

    Okay, so I loved the flow and format of this poem. Overall I didn't really see anything I can say that was particularly bad. To be quiet honest loved it ...

    Jul 25, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » Teen Fiction, Realistic Re: Heartbeat Academy: Chapter 7 *

    Okay, first another short chapter, I believe this chapter and the last chapter should be fused. Like I said in my opinion there is no such thing as too much ...

    Jul 18, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: The Terrible Youth of Freznel: 2

    Chapter 2........one word, Beautiful. I loved Frenzel air of confidence when she walked in the building. She most defiantly a show stopper, and the manager knows. Lol, it would be ...

    Jul 8, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: The Terrible Youth of Freznel: 1

    Hi! I enjoyed this read, I really liked it, although I will say the MC confused me. She seen something in the paper that reminded her of her families death ...

    Jun 27, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Mystery / Suspense Re: The Emerald Treasure: Chapter 1

    Great story. I love your concept and the flow you have.......lol very long read, but I cannot complain though because my chapters be the same. It's hard to decide the ...

    Jun 18, 2016
  • Short Story » Action / Adventure, Dramatic Re: The Day Steve Warred With Apples

    Lol, this story is a bunch of randoms put together. There is no plot no point no anything, and I have to say.......LOVED IT! I couldn't stop from laughing. I ...

    Jun 13, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » Teen Fiction, Realistic Re: Heartbeat Academy: Chapter 6 *

    Okay love the story, but I hate this chapter. Do not get me wrong I loved how it started, and I love the middle but from there the story began ...

    Jun 10, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Horror Re: Reaper Academy: Chapter One

    Oh okay, I see this story is something totally different from what I read but in the since something I read. I find it interesting that you wrote a story ...

    Jun 6, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, General Re: Billi Wack and the Story of Mystery- Chapter 3.3

    Okay, Ms. Tuesday awesome chapter here. I love your story out line and I love how you are showing the story from multiple angles. I think only gifted writers can ...

    Jun 6, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » Teen Fiction, Realistic Re: Heartbeat Academy: Chapter 5 *

    Round of applause. This has to be by far the best chapter I read by you. It had enough details to keep me interested and I love your cliff hanger ...

    May 28, 2016
  • Other » General, General Re: Unlucky (intro)

    Hi Ms. Creativity I haven't read a piece of your work in a while but I must say after finally getting some time off to do so you still got ...

    May 27, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Humor Re: Billi Wack and the Story of Mystery- Chapter 3.2

    Lol, This is cute. I loved chapter 3.2, and I love how it flowed. Your writing was very clear and I understand what is happening. I also love the scene ...

    May 16, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » Teen Fiction, Realistic Re: Heartbeat Academy: Chapter 4 *

    I per say like this chapter and all it is about. However I still have the same problem with this like the last chapter I review. You need more juice, ...

    May 13, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, General Re: Billi Wack and the Story of Mystery- Chapter 3.1 (Re-write)

    Lol, I really do love this chapter. I see what you did here. You introduce us to Billi wack in chapter 2 but then introduce us to his pursuers in ...

    May 12, 2016


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