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Re: Earth's Child- Chapter 2
Hi Hikaru here with a review for you! First off id like to say that even though i havent read the first few chapters of this wonderful story, it seems ...
Feb 4, 2017 -
Re: Stop the Rewind: Chapter 6
Hey Mage, Hikaru here with a review (well more of a thoughtful review) Im just gonna start off by saying this chapter is really cool to begin with, ive recently ...
Jan 15, 2017 -
Re: Farcry:2
Hey pumpkinhead, Hikaru here with a Review for You now lets get started! Now here's the first thing i noticed. "His father is thrilled when he sees the little fish ...
Jan 15, 2017 -
Re: Glorious Fantasy Ch.2: Death Kittens
Hi there MeatbunCat! Hikaru here to review your chapter! The first error i noticed was in this sentence right here. "I don’t think elves could do what I am." I ...
Jan 8, 2017 -
Re: Infinite Potential (Chapter One) - Tuesday, December 27, 1:00 AM
Hey Hikaru here with a review. "Fucking yes. He’s a good father. Even at sixteen, he’s a fucking good father." Sure the F bomb is good to drop in a ...
Dec 29, 2016 -
Re: Part 1 Chapter 1
Hey Hikaru here with a review. "As it was long before, food had become the main source of struggle. With the absence of life, plants were unable to grow. In ...
Dec 29, 2016 -
Re: The Red Hand Came Out // Pt. 1
Hey, Hikaru here with a review. The first thing i noticed was this part right here. "Walid looked handsomer than usual" instead of handsomer to imply how much more handsome ...
Dec 27, 2016 -
Re: Chronology of Despair
Hey there, Hikaru here with some advice and a not so harsh review. First off let me say that this is really awesome and interesting to read, and that the ...
Dec 25, 2016 -
Re: Song of the Long War now Gone
Hi Hikaru here with a review. First off Id like to thank you for this Short-Short-Short poem witch is a really nice break from all the either kinda long stories ...
Dec 19, 2016 -
Re: summer days/summer nights
Hey! Hikaru here with a review. This Poem was a good read and you split it well between the Summer Days and Summer Nights so that part wasnt very hard ...
Dec 11, 2016 -
Re: My Profile Picture
Wow this piece is really cool looking, i like how the designs are on the same side of the eye of the same color, and the color of their eyes ...
Dec 11, 2016 -
Re: Discover Quantum Computing !!
Hey, Hikaru here with some advice and compliments for this scientific piece of work. First thing ive got to say is Wow talk about staying on point, you kept what ...
Dec 4, 2016 -
Re: The Guardians
Hey hikaru here, with a some compliments and some error points. "But I knew everyone's eye colour." Just remove the "u" in color and in "The man, the man keeping ...
Dec 4, 2016 -
Re: Gods and Kings: Fury of the Desert [Chapter 1- ongoing]
Hey Hikaru here with a review. I loved the surreal seriousness of this story, when i started reading the first few paragraphs it created an image in my mind of ...
Dec 4, 2016 -
Re: Chapter 5: Thorough Sebastian's Eyes; Loosing Sanity
Hey Hikaru the Noob here to give a nooby review! I really liked how you started the chapter off, already withing the characters thoughts. But i got a little confused ...
Nov 30, 2016