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Re: Luperca
Hey, I really liked how the tone fit well with the tempo of the story going from this woman being a human and slowly over time transforming into a wolf. ...
Jun 27, 2011 -
Re: Penguins!
Hey, I really liked how you handled your random topic. Your first paragraph was based on a more serious poetic feel, then you foiled it with the rest of your ...
Jun 27, 2011 -
Re: Forgetting (Edited)
I liked this! Yeah you should totally go for writing the next part(s). I really enjoyed the whole mirror paragraph because I'm really big on eyes. (Girls and pretty eyes, ...
Jun 14, 2010 -
Re: Butterfly Kiss
That was soooooooo cute. I liked how you described the kiss and how high you seemed to get off of it. The only problem I had with your piece was ...
May 7, 2010 -
Re: An Affinity with Love
First thought after reading this was one big puppy dog face :elephant: :elephant: I only put elephants because I couldn't find anything that seemed doggy enough. That's not the point ...
May 1, 2010 -
Re: Imprisoned
I really liked the material that was covered in this piece but at the same time I feel like you are taking this story way too quickly. To me the ...
Apr 19, 2010 -
Re: Forever
An interesting set of paragraphs. I really liked the descriptions because I could very easily set myself into the mood you were in when you started the transition into the ...
Apr 5, 2010 -
Re: The Cricket
I really liked this poem. I felt so peaceful reading through the lines. The only thing I can say is that i'm not sure whenever you say Chirp, Chirp. Chirp, ...
Feb 25, 2010 -
Re: Temporary Love
Loveless, Im so happy that I get to remark on your work after that nice comment you shot at me awhile back. I really liked the feel of the story. ...
Feb 23, 2010 -
Re: Blame it on the rain pt.1
I also really liked your story. The begining really drew me into it and I liked how at the start you described thier relationship to one another. The whole part ...
Feb 13, 2010 -
Re: Love
I really can feel while reading this what you mean to say to us, the audience. I enjoyed reading this :) The only editing thing I can think of for ...
Feb 6, 2010 -
Re: confusion
I'd change "edge" and "You drive me crazy" and "abyss" because these are a little weak. Unlike Jas, I love these words in your poem. I think it's a personal ...
Jan 20, 2010 -
Re: Such a Beautiful Girl
Amazing, I feel like the woman in my life just died before me after reading that :thud: . Keep up the good work and I really like the way you ...
Jan 20, 2010 -
Re: Senseless Love
wow, your poem summerizes a massive swelling of emotion I had for a girl awhile back. It made me sit down and remember all those hours where I sat at ...
Jan 19, 2010
