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A touching piece. I'm not surprised that you had written this/based it on your own life, because there's something about putting your own emotions into your writing that transfers to ...

I really like the way it's structured. It has this kind of 'moral tale' (I'm sure there's an actual word for that) feeling to it. To be honest, I half ...

The first thing I'm going to do is quote some of my favorite parts of the text. --- "What she said resonated with him in a way that he wanted ...

I've never read a steampunk story before, but since I'm an advocate for the meshing of science and magic, perhaps it's a genre I should give a bit more time ...

I don't think I'm going to be the kind of reviewer who points out all the grammar issues people have in their writing, but I will give you my thoughts ...

By the Goddess! That was great! It was a nice, short, but effective prologue. I'm not saying anything bad about this, because besides the nitpicks (which I don't really like ...

This was a great prologue - very well written, and reminds me of my own in some ways. There is not a whole lot for me to add to what ...

Right, onto this chapter! :D This was solid for the most part. But it won't help to not point out some flaws. I did see an issue with structure, in ...

This was great. I haven't read many things on here yet, but so far this is probably one of the best things I have read. There was a point made ...

Well, this was not as strong as the prologue, likely because a lot of the mystery and the dark tone has been somewhat lost, but that may be appropriate for ...

Brilliant. The structure of this is so easy on the eyes it made it so simple, and enjoyable to read. Some people are against prologues and just skip them. I'd ...

It started off a bit difficult for me to understand, but after the scene break, I got really into it. I don't know what it was, but there were some ...

Nice chapter! I am glad there is the addition of action in this one too, which I think was actually quite well done. Some people say actions scenes are easy, ...

This is my first time saying anything about anyone's work on this site so far, so be honoured! :D I have played Skyrim numerous times, and have made so many ...