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Hi, Gwen! This is a great poem for so many reasons. It's a joy to read and review. First of all, your use of rhyming is masterful. Sometimes rhyme can ...

Hi, Storm! First of all, let me just say that this is a great beginning to your story. Most of your grammar and phrasing is perfect, and your idea is ...

Wow! Really, wow! Your writing's backed up by a clear rhyme scheme, you have lots of great metaphors, and (even better), you give us this line: Soften me, baby blanket, ...

Hello, Jasmine! First off, I want to congratulate you on your descriptive language and use of senses. One of the best phrases here was, "I inhaled the damp and musky ...

Happy Holidays, Clarity! This is a beautiful poem, and I could really relate to it. There were no obvious flaws, so you're gonna have to listen to my nitpicking. 1. ...

Hello, jazzydracula! Nice idea, by the way. I really would have enjoyed the formatting--YWS can really mess sometimes with that. :) Anyway. I think that you're a very beautiful, inspired ...

Hi, Dr. FeelGood! (Nice name, by the way.) Excellent language! Also, nice job incorporating irony into your piece. However, you should think about the expression "show, not tell". This is ...

Hello, SecreteJournalist! Great job! I've always had a bit of dislike for haikus, but you've introduced them in an exciting way. :) I have a few suggestions: 1. Day 8, ...

Hello, Bellator! IronSpark here for a SUPER short review. First of all, I love these lines, "American genius/American fool." Maybe change the "fool" to "fools"? I don't know, just an ...

Hi, Fortis. IronSpark here. I just want to say how BRILLIANT this piece is. I love the line, "But there is one question that is boundless, timeless. A question that ...

Heya, Lylas. IronSpark here... again. Anyway, I love the ending of this! Beautiful. Especially the "s/h/a/t/t/e/r/ed". It really captured the essence of the poem--you could picture the poem falling ap

Hello, Lylas. IronSpark here! Okay, so I love this poem for many reasons, but let me just start with the formatting... Beautiful--it really adds to the composition as a whole. ...

Heya, TakeThatYouFiend. IronSpark here... I don't know that much about lyrics, but I'll give it a shot with a quick review. Okay. Just wanted to say how much I love ...

Hello, Lechatnoir. IronSpark here. Wow, nice work! I just wanted to point out three things I loved about this and you could do a bit better with: 1. You have ...

Hello, Lumi! IronSpark here for a quick review. I'm no expert in poetry, so I'll stick just a couple of things. I love the line, "and in the final chapter, ...