Home of the Brave

well done.
you have a clear idea what you wish to convey and go about it.

the sentiments of the American to this would be similar to yours.

the social and political scene not so different in other countries. so we can relate to it.

keep writing and keep reviewing.

to read my work, do visit- The first betrayal

and give me your opinions

Well hi. I generally don't review poetry, but that's because I don't understand poetry. I understand this poem, so I'll get right to it.

Well I'm finding criticism a bit hard. However, I did find one grammar error. "Educations supporters" should be "Education supporters." But that's definitely a nitpick.

I am absolutely in love with the last eight lines. The rest is very good, but those last lines. Wow.

Ooh, I do have one criticism. Sort of. So, I happen to know that this poem is about your love/hate relationship with good ol' Murica. And you say that in the summary. But, to be honest, this kind of sounds like a hate relationship with America. I think it's mostly because you end it with "We’re messing the world up, we’re digging our grave." Since your other parts are good accompanied by bad, it's important to continue that. These are the last few lines, and they're supposed to sort of summarize the poem. So instead of "We’re messing the world up," I suggest you say something positive. Like, since America doesn't hurt other countries as much as we hurt ourselves, you could say something like: "We're fixing the world." except, you know, more accurate (since we're not actually FIXING the world). And also obviously more poetic.

Welp, anyway. I hope this helped!

-Astronaut

Hi Bellator, Amindor here.
I don't see any errors in this, so good job! I think, although, you maybe should have used a more detailed and riveting vocabulary. Other than that, everything was fine. You still captured the readers and got their attention. It was a very good piece of poetry and it had a great smooth flow. I loved it.

Holy sugar plums. Thanks so much for all the likes!

Hello, Bellator! IronSpark here for a SUPER short review.

First of all, I love these lines, "American genius/American fool." Maybe change the "fool" to "fools"? I don't know, just an opinion.

Also, do you need to capitalize every letter after a line break?

Sorry for the short review... I'll review something else of yours with a longer one.

Keep writing!

-IronSpark

Greetings Bellator!
First and formost I have to applaud your brilliant title. When I entered the greenroom this evening, (which I don't do that often these days) this title caught my attention immediately (as if was begging me to read it). I also like the way you end your poem with the title. Jolly good!
Now, the piece. Your vocabulary is quite satisfactory, not too simple, but not too complex, dull.and boring, either. You made it easy to read, and kept the tempo of the piece constant.
Grammar (poem-style): Your line length is consistent the entire poem through, never becoming too long. Those lines that you did shorten a bit stood out, but in a good way. They draw the reader's attention to them, and are important to the piece.
Now, a little "duh-moment". I think it is safe to say that you're American, which (in my opinion) gives you the right to write your view of your country. I believe that only people in a country can complain or write poems about their country. Unless that person has experienced qnother country in its entirity, thus the good abd the bad.
A marvelous piece to read, therefore I am rating it 8.5 out of ten. I hope to read much more of your workd in the future.

Sincerely,
The Wandering Wizard

i love this more than peter fox

i can't even review this it's too perf already

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