GreenTulip

This Chapter really didn't keep my attention after I read the first few paragraphs. It got boring, to be honest. If there was some way that you could make it ...

This is interesting. Though the first part of the chapter needs some work. It moved to quickly and I lost tract of what was happening. I was following, but the ...

This is a unique story. I feel as if some should places should be taken slower, and some explained more. This is a story, that caught me in the first ...

This is how I feel like what I feel like the poem could be if it were to flow easier and have a heavier impact upon the reader. I hope ...

This is unique but didn't catch my attention as I tried to finish the poem, so it made it hard to read after the first few lines. Even in the ...

Wow. This was very descriptive. The description made the read very interesting. I loved it, as I am a descriptive writer with a very descriptive mind. This entire story was ...

I liked the the sombreness and the concept of this poem; it is also correct grammatically. This poem is good, but hte phrasing int he stanzas are very repetitive. It's ...

I must say, that at first I though this poem would be kinda boring- based off the title, but while reading through the poem I began to see excitement and ...

This si a very well one poem. I love the fact that is uses the Old English instead of using the current english styles. it creates a more unique flow. ...

"He was glass at the bottom of the sea,//smooth, churned by the waves, invisible." The first two lines are hard to follow, and the second line: "smooth, churned by the ...

Wow this poem holds a powerful punch that made me feel the emotions that could be held behind the words. I am know to write very emotion filled poems, and ...

This is a great chapter, that leaves the reader questioning what will happen next. This is a very good chapter, and I love the fact that you pulled in the ...

This is a very good chapter. I was drawn into the chapter from the very first line. This chapter has barely quenched my thirst that wants me to read more. ...

This is very Gollum like. I can imagine Gollum in his cave actually saying this. The way you spell the words helps to create the picture of Gollum and helps ...

I must say that you have done a marvelous job in writing this poem. The words that are used in this piece of writing is very unique and helps to ...