GoldFlame

Hey, Serene! (I may sound a bit disjointed because I've been staring at a computer screen for hours and my brain's chicken-noodle soup, but I'll do the best I can.) ...

Hey, Flite! Happy Review Day! Jars of flowers filled the room, resting upon the wooden shelves in an orderly line. I'd recommend passive voice here: "The room was filled with ...

Hey, Pandemonium! This'll be a quick review because my schedule's gotten a bit fuller than planned. You have an amazing style. Everything flowed so well, my eyes just skated down ...

Here at last! *wheeze-hack* I am special—according to him, that is. I love the M-dash; it really contributes to the atmosphere! Perhaps the rope tying me down is a measure ...

Hey, Therese! Sorry about the delay! Swinging his horse forward, beside Sier de Gourcout, Jean nodded in the direction of the girl, now being moved onto a stretcher and out ...

Hey, BellaRoma! (This is me dropping a review after having secretly read the first two chapters.) During the day the eye watering glare of fluorescent lights beat down on us. ...

Hey, Pomp! Lightning swayed through the heavens like gargantuan pendulums; strike after strike, each flash was accentuated by another, brighter one. The forks of light themselves were well-defined, so

Hey, tronks! The whole piece had a distinct Doctor Who-ish air about it. Both featured a man who'd submerged himself in depression and was oblivious to the lives of those ...

Hey! As usual, with you guys, I'll be rererereading the piece wondering how I can convey my admiration, squeaking out a few petty nitpicks, then waiting impatiently for the next ...

Hey, Pomp! Here as promised. I've always been kinda hesitant reviewing Spotlight works, but gosh, underlying themes, hidden messages, breath-stealing imagery. How could I resist? :D night time is not ...

Heya, Therese! :D Grammar first, then miscellaneous, then praise, hopefully in that order. Joan turned pale, and carefully pulled on the reins of her horse. Since "and" is serving as ...

Hey, Dude! :D Lucian lied on the hard wooden floor Aurora already pointed this out, but I'll give you a chart so no further mistakes are made: Lay Conjugated in ...

Another chapter! :D I'll confess, I'm kinda glad there's not loads of detail and description and whatnot. Besides everything being easier to stomach, it suits your style, and I wouldn't ...

Hey, Timmy! More Legend stuff! :D He shrugged his shoulders and looked at the disaster. Yes, this did look like his house. Overturned tables and chairs, upside down and broken ...

Hey, Deanie! I haven't reviewed poetry in a while, but I love your style and I kinda felt obligated once I saw this at the peak of the Literary Spotlight. ...