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well, I never went much for the whole "I love you" sentiments, but the poem wasnt bad, it was a little un-poetic, too plain. so i agree with other people, ...

a little sinister, but good, i wouldnt use soulless, but its your choice. the rhythm is a little choppy, but still OK. nice job overall.

awesome poem, im surprised at this, great rhyme scheme, nice flow, if you say, "or would we forget them tommorow?" that might work better, peace.

loved it, the rhyme scheme is great, subject matter is good, jam is great. W00T!!! GO JAM

yeah thanks, those are th normal things that are wron, i tend to switch tense alot in my stories, so ive been trying to work on that.

absolutely he can find God wherever he goes... even YWS. i liked the poem, rhthym was interesting and unexpected, the mood was good.

nobody can expirience quite the same things as you. We all have our own special pains and sorrow, shame and pride, sin and virtue.

rhythm was great, the idea was sound, the word are a bit hard to understand if you dont know jack about computers... nice job overall... i agree, with whoever "How ...

way for nobody to reply! great job. i didnt think it was THAT bad. oh well, maybe no one was onnline then?

Damn, thats good, i know im echoing everyone else, but it needs to be said... again . the perspective was interestin, the idea original, the storytelling superb. excellant job.

i think it was clear what went on, she was being sent to hell. other than that, it was a bit vague.

interesting story, im curious about where it goes from here... if anywhere?

too true, your rhymes were off, but not that much, and the poem was odd... good though, so keep it.

i think not. that is something ive always done, i will rhyme, with only one, or two of the lines, but not in the rest, it gives it an identity ...

good poem, i like the idea, and the rhythm is a bit odd, but fine, the rhyming is good. great job.