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Falling Apart

by Gahks


Falling Apart
Things fall apart
so quickly. The vase
that I tried madly
to mend
has broken
once more.

Now I am falling,
falling apart inside.
The pieces of my soul
shatter, splinter
like glass glinting in the sun.

I lie broken, soulless,
in surrender to ruin.
Yet even as I face failure,
my shadow watches, smiles, laughs.


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Fri May 02, 2008 4:47 pm
God says...



a little sinister, but good, i wouldnt use soulless, but its your choice. the rhythm is a little choppy, but still OK. nice job overall.





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