Gahks

Hey there! This is a good start. You communicated your thoughts well (after a good few reads!) and I thought your lack of punctuation, if deliberate, was a stroke of ...

Hey there, This is unbelievably good. I mean unbelievably. Your expression is simply exquisite, particularly in these phrases: "The sun [is] peeping in through the sliver in the curtains, You ...

Hi there, You have some interesting ideas in this poem. I think the curtain image is great, but underdeveloped and only obliquely referenced in the breaking "walls of protection" in ...

Hey there, Firstly, let the poem tell its own story. Don't spoonfeed us your message and meaning!If we as readers feel something is vague, we'll probably let you know. The ...

Hey Jack, Perhaps for the last few lines to make sense, something like: "It is colder now that it has ever been : stale, lukewarm, (I think a colon makes ...

Hey Brad, Yes, I agree with the previous reviewer. Your technical skill is admirable in this poem and you have clearly put a lot of thought into it, but I ...

Hey there, This is a good start. You indeed have treated such an overused subject well. What you now need to do is refine your expression: you need to show ...

Hi there, For a relatively new writer, the confidence with which you put your feelings on the page is admirable. The few words you use encapsulate express so much, which ...

I love reflexive poetry! I've just got this idea for a new poem, If on a winter's night a poet... - recognise the title? Punctuation could be improved in places ...

Hey there, Here's your favour! I had an entire free period to kill when I got your message, so your plea was well-timed! You brilliantly built up the sense of ...

Me too. I liked your concept, but your execution was found wanting. You need to go into a greater depth with your treatment of the subject. Maybe something for the ...

Hey there! I haven't seen you before on the site so I thought I'd offer my thoughts. As anti-pop says, this is extremely well-written. For a first poem, your craft ...

Unfortunately, it seems like the previous reviewer and I are at odds! You don't have to capitalise every line in this poem. Seamus Heaney doesn't do it! Simon Armitage doesn't ...

For a beginner on this forum, I have to agree with the others: this is a very well-written poem. You have carefully chosen your rhymes and have created some inspired ...

This is an interesting poem filled with clever imagery in places and some great rhymes, but the main problem with it is that there's just too much to take in. ...