Gahks

'Lo there, Gahks here to review your work! For something you must have written out fairly quickly, this is not a bad start. It definitely shows promise. The beginning is ...

Hi there! I saw your poem had no reviews, so I'll be the first to post one! No one has a problem with venting your feelings out in poetry. In ...

My mother once told me that the wind was the voice of the world But if there is no wind Does the world have nothing to say Or has it ...

Hey there! First impressions: I'm dead confused. You said the first few lines were ironic, so what does that mean? That they don't have a consistent message? Are they deliberately ...

Hey there! Like some of the other reviewers, I found the rhyme pattern inconsistent. While this can be easily rectified, there are more fundamental issues that need to be dealt ...

Hi there! Great stuff. You seem to know a lot about the emo culture, and your personal experiences are clearly reflected in the speaker, so I can really identify with ...

Hey there! Some of the imagery is great, but the fact that you have restricted yourself to two quatrains limits the sheer potential of this poem. I can see some ...

Bonjour! I believe 'tis a great poem. You have handled your subject matter well and, as Eimear says, have expressed some deep truths; this is the kind of poetry that ...

Prose: The Great Gatsby, by F. Scott Fitzgerald The Old Man and the Sea, by Ernest Hemingway Atonement, by Ian McEwan Birdsong, by Sebastian Faulks The Remains of the Day, ...

Hey there! I'll try and make this as brief and to the point as possible. The poem's message is well communicated, but i think you can go furthrt with it, ...

Absolutely agreed, KnightlyAngel and June. This poem has some good ideas but the execution was found wanting. You need to show us what the speaker means by "inadequate." Heck, make ...

Hey there! I review this in return for your very useful evaluation of my poem! I noticed the rhyme scheme changes from pararhyme (half rhyme) in stanza I to full ...

Hey there! As Snoink says, the main problem with this is the lack of images. You mention all these emotive phrases - "I'm not just sad / I'm angry" - ...

*gasps* You're Australian? Pretty cool... I'm British born Chinese, by the way. Again, you have really beautiful, lyrical imagery in this poem: "...I remember that eternal yesterday of that eternal ...

Hello! I'm Gahks and I'll be reviewing your work today. You clearly possess some talent and some of your images are absolutely wonderful: "...the sound of a mouth talking and ...