Gadi.

I actually found the ending quite energetic. Overall, the poem was good--though not without its let-downs. My least favorite lines and phrases (with reasoning) are: "I wake and stir, though ...

I have to say, I completely agree with Via on everything. I liked the concrete form, the way the stanzas were placed. It was new and very clean-cut. Otherwise... meh. ...

:/ Here's a line-by-line crit of this poem. Sorry if I'm too blunt at any point. We Knew that somehow we would die, No matter what we do. Why do ...

I like this!!! I saw this on the link on your Emotional Poetry tutorial, but I have to disagree--this is not "emotional" in the sense you were speaking about. This ...

Sorry, cat, but I didn't like this one too much. The problem was its dull repetition, I guess. I mean, the first three lines are so much alike that they ...

Hahaha this was andom. Well, the truth is, that I did not like this poem--I mean, it wasnt exceptional, it was just exceptionally random. And that could make a poem ...

Okay--it was good. But it was dull, old good. It was "aww" good. It wasn't good in the sense that I'll remember it, and here are some reasons: Your humour ...

That was terrible. If you want to use profanity, make sure they actually fit. I mean, using random descriptions and events and blah doesn't make a poem funny, unless it's ...

So there were a couple mistakes many people pointed out that you still didn't fix, like "dieing", and many more. Another thing that sort of annoyed me is " The ...

you can't spell worth beans HAHAHA Hilarious. So I agree with snoink--You MUST MUST MUST add something interesting to this, character development, something--otherwise this would be an endless, boring

NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!! This is in the structure of a poem! Don't you understand? A poem could be everything, EVERYTHING. It could be one word; it could be a breakless paragraph; it ...

Okay, so... interesting. Smorgh--(a compliment coming up)--you can really grab the reader, hold on to them tight, shake them, never let go of them, and then when you do they ...

Amazing. This is a great script. I loved it--one of the best I read on here, and though I liked some of your other ones better, this one was fascinating, ...

Innocence. It's about a girl who goes to school where a lot of teenage girls have mass suicides, and she investigates and fears that her school nurse is killing them ...

So, this was a mediocre poem. Mediocre use of language, interesting concept. For you, I'll take one stanza and completely change so you'll see what you can do to make ...