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Um... I don't really like this. It's kind of bland, punctuated wrongly, slit in all of the wrong places, and has a cliched message. Here are some tips about how ...

I liked this! Ha! Oh, the satire. The first sentence drew me in completely. I loved all the rhymes in this poem, only one felt a bit forced. You sit ...

I like it. The only two major problems I have with this are 1) The characters talk the same way. They are both sarcastic, they both have the same dialect, ...

This is more like a synopsis of a novel than a real story. It is info-dump. I really can't see any way to fix it, but I think as a ...

This is better than some prologues around here. I have to say, I was impressed by the ability of you to show us just a little of the place, the ...

""a tiger behind that cool face."" Ugh. Bad nickname. Plain ol' "Tiger" would be beter. "Like his namesake, the roc bird, he was a loner" SHOW DON'T TEL!!! "Now Patrick ...

HAHA! I liked this! A lot! You describe the jam in a comic way, and still we can see it, sitting there, all alone and sticky and..hahaha! Just change the ...

Mmmm... I liked it. It was not amazing, but the rhythm, the rhyme, the sound, the dynamics--all were pretty nice! Just one suggestion (a general one): Use stronger words. Here ...

Down falls the world Around your ears I like this! A house for you And all your peers I no like this! Ugh. Forced, way too forced... And what is ...

Nice! What I liked about this is that it was about us, about the world, about the universe. It's sort of like the big bang, but it's also about the ...

"That if someone dies, their dead" They're=They are, Their="Their house", there="There was a house" "crying as people placed" People is a cliche. Say "family and friends" or "mourners". "best guy-frie

Nice! It feels really deep. I especially liked the last line. My favorite stanza was the allusion to the cross, it makes it so much more spiritual. This was, however, ...

This was good. I liked how the poem flowed, how the rhythm was original but almost familiar. This is, however, quite telly. You don't show us anything! The first line ...

I like it. But I am a little disappointed, that such an excellent exercise has no theme or message at all. I've seen a few motifs, a few symbols, but ...

Sorry to disappoint you....but this is rather terrible. Now, don't get all depressed--it's just that I hate cliches! And this poem was one cliche after another. I mean, how many ...