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Re: The Chronicles of a Public Bus (part 1.11)
Heyo, a Stormy planet has arrived for a fancy review. Happy Review Day! The way you started out this chapter/part is quite nice. I like the describing words used in ...
Sep 27, 2015 -
Re: Wish Life was a Book
Hey Chrissy! JupaJupa the Planet Pokémon here for a review (I'm so weird). This is incredibly relatable. I, and probably a LOT of other people, read a ton of fan ...
Sep 27, 2015 -
Re: Your name is Eridan Ampora...
Heyo, JupaJupa the Planet Pokémon here for a review (I'm so weird)! I think the way your reversed the first and second part was pure genius. I really admire the ...
Sep 27, 2015 -
Re: The Letter
Happy Review Day! I'm here to give you a quality review, maaaaan. –or hid it– This needs to be in parenthesis, the random dash is not needed and disrupts the ...
Sep 27, 2015 -
Re: fire everyday
Man, I know what this feels like. My mum can be terrifying and rude every day, and I'm sorry if this is how it is with you. I'll be here ...
Sep 24, 2015 -
Re: Man on Fire
Hey artemis15sc. The flames look white. Everything is white. This isn't the best way to start out a poem. It doesn't feel like an introduction, and these words are a ...
Sep 22, 2015 -
Re: really
I liked that this gave me a feeling of hope, then completely shot me down. The only thing you forgot to do was add another comma after become confident in ...
Sep 22, 2015 -
Re: Unseen Beauty
Hey, GreenTulip. I found this poem to be very descriptive. You definitely did well with describing things. I just have a few little nitpicks here and there, but I'm going ...
Sep 22, 2015 -
Re: Tumbling Down the Stairs
I read the first line and I was already pretty happy with this poem. I find this very cute and humorous! Falling down the stairs is a funny approach that ...
Sep 22, 2015 -
Re: dIrTy knEEs, clOuDy sKiEs
Gosh darnit, not this again (I actually might do this, myself). The unicorns jabbed their horns into my knees and shoved them into unicorn poop, infecting them. This is definitely ...
Sep 22, 2015 -
Re: I
Well lookie, lookie at this cookie. I'm an idiot. Onto the review! One of the first things I noticed after actually reading the poem was the heading at the top ...
Sep 22, 2015 -
Re: September Eleventh
Hey Mergie! I like the subject of the poem here, not many people write about it in poetry form, but I'm glad you did! The first thing I noticed was ...
Sep 18, 2015 -
Re: I'm... A Dreamer
Hey BlueDaisy2018, I'm here to check out some of your work, eh? The first thing I noticed in this poem was the format. This is a thing that a lot ...
Sep 18, 2015 -
Re: Welcome to America
I really like this poem. It brings up a topic that not many other writers seem to care about. But this was in the past, America is opening its mind ...
Sep 16, 2015 -
Re: Rainy Home (Edited)
This is appeals to me. You see, I love rain very much. Although many people will find it insane to stand out in the pouring rain and just take a ...
Sep 15, 2015