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Re: My Little Invalid
Wow, despite how dark this really, truly was, I really truly liked it. There was a certain raw emotion there I find you can try to write about, but it's ...
Dec 2, 2012 -
Re: Imperfect Perfection (don't come any closer)
" But if you get too close I see that you are ugly. You're ugly just like me. " I feel like the "you're ugly just like me" could even ...
Nov 20, 2012 -
Re: Speak to Me - Prologue
First and foremost, I like the idea -- not something that's really been touched on a whole lot, or from what I know, it hasn't. And, like what had been ...
Nov 17, 2012 -
Re: understand me when I open myself to you
[quote]reach beyond our bodies like phantom limbs that stretch and grow into beautiful things.[quote] This was such a pretty line! Other than that, I have not much to say, except ...
Nov 15, 2012 -
Re: How to Break a Bridge
Man, Threnody, this was amazing ! I really like the style this was written in -- how the lyrics related to every paragraph (obviously your intention) and how it sounds ...
Jun 29, 2012 -
Re: The Messengers- Chapter 1
G'day, Spark. I have decided to review this wonderful piece of yours. * His body was seized with convolutions, he leaned back until her caught sight of her face, tear ...
Mar 31, 2012 -
Re: An Ugly Girl
holy cow! This is beautiful! There isn't really much that I can say, but the simplistic beauty of it, the way its formatted, the descriptions ... it's all wonderful! You ...
Nov 29, 2011 -
Re: My Blood, My Own
Hihello! I have decided to be the second reviewer on this here lovely story! Blurs. Multicolored, smudged blurs surrounding me. The flashing of cameras, the soft-edged hues of fabric, the ...
Sep 11, 2011 -
Re: One New Message
Hello there! YOU HAVE BEEN CHOSEN! Basically, I'm just reviewing your work today. I will show you the original line (in quotes), then make my adjustments in red . Shall ...
Sep 10, 2011 -
Re: Harry Potter and the Philosopher's Stone (Twitterized)
HARRY_P Holy shit. I’m a wizard. 1 Jul XD! Oh man ... I can't express in words ... HARRY_P Met @RonWeasley on the train. He’s a ginger, but he seems ...
Aug 2, 2011 -
Re: Do not click this.
Wow, this was cool, hah! What a great way to title it, and what a great poem it was! I was expecting to see something ... different. Not something, almost, ...
Apr 10, 2011 -
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Hey there! I love the song Lucky , by the way! lol So, I didn't really notice much mistakes in here -- just a couple, if any, really. The only ...
Jan 30, 2011 -
Re: Unknown Blues
Hey Lily! I'll put my changes/ suggestions in bold, okay? The beating of my heart ; i t increases , just as the light goes dark. One thing I noticed ...
Jan 9, 2011 -
Re: The Man in the Rain
Hello there! A great title is a title that catches a reader's attention -- and I liked the sound of this one! So what I'm going to do with my ...
Jan 8, 2011 -
Re: As the Moon Was Waxing Gibbous
I'm no poetry expert -- don't kill me. I love the title, by the way. Now, I believe that WritersUnleashed has caught quite a few things, so there isn't really ...
Jan 8, 2011
