Fireweed

I like! Especially the first 2 lines. You captured your passion without any unneccasary words, which I know is much more difficult than it sounds. Kudos!! :pig:

Twas very funny and sweet. James and Maxine are very realistic characters.

I like these alot. Usually haikus bug me, but these are clever and thoughtful.

feh... I hate the term raghead...

interesting... a bit creepy, but cool. It flows well and has a cool, chilling ambiance.

well done!! I liked the way you summed up the stages of the character's lrelationship with just a simple word or phrase. This was sweet and unique.

Awesome rhymes and lovely imagery!! I really like this. One suggestion: the last line is a bit awkward, I think you should rephrase it "They bring beauty to the world, ...

Simple but lovely. Cool how you created such a vivid image with so few words. I like the simile comparing the stars to pearls on a necklace; very unique.Nice work.

Like several people mentioned, it was a bit repetetive and rhyme-y, but the way you showed the girl maturing was really effective. Your rhymes are good- not to forced; but ...

Like several people mentioned, it was a bit repetetive and rhyme-y, but the way you showed the girl maturing was really effective. Your rhymes are good- not to forced; but ...

Like emotion_less said, this seems a bit choppy and disconnected. To me, it seems more like a setting for a story or something than a poem. Great as that, but ...

okay, heres something noone has mentioned: ZEE TITLE!!! I was just browsing some old YWS fiction and I saw another story called revenge. a friend 'o' mine recently wrote one ...

merci.l

nice rythym, nice rhyme. im a little unclear on what you were actually talking about, but this is a cool and thoughtful poem.

oh. okay. gotcha. sorry. 8)