Published February 12, 2006
Stars hang in the sky,
Like pearls on a drop-necklace;
A coronet moon.
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Oooh, I love haikus, especially when they're done well, like this one. Like bubbles said, there's not a whole lot to critique, but you wrote it very well, and created lots of good images in a very small space. And it was cool how the jewelry seemed to link the other two stanzas together.
Nice work!
Aren't haikus so much fun to write?
Nicely done, Kay!!
at first I wondered at the title, but I get it now!
I agree - lovely. The thing about haiku's is that there isnt enough there to really critique, LOL, so I'm stuck without much to say. Oh well. I loved it anyway. It was very smooth; I found it peaceful, though that could just be the way stars make me feel. Also, I like the way you linked the jewelry idea in both lines. Very well done.
tbr: im pretty sure a coronet is like a crown but just a circular band of silver or gold.
thanks to you both for the comments
Simple but lovely. Cool how you created such a vivid image with so few words. I like the simile comparing the stars to pearls on a necklace; very unique.Nice work.
What does coronet mean?
It was pretty, simple. Very, but pretty