Fireweed

Ha ha, I am also a fan of inserting irrelevant french into poetry. :) It just looks so sophisticated, you know? Anyway, you have some good imagery here but for ...

Wow. That's twisted and beautiful and bizarre and poignant and utterly, utterly captivating. I think my favorite line was "the Shakespeare of pain, the Picasso of strife." My only suggestions ...

Wow, as a musician, I'm really impressed by how eloquently you captured the exhilarating tension of playing in an orchestra. Like Suzanne said, it works taken literally but can easily ...

I would cut the phrase "bleeding and dying." Tired emo imagery. Other than that, though, I thought this was, well, gorgeous. It flowed beautifully and you actually pulled off the ...

Aww... I swear, if someone ever writes something like this for me... Anyway, let's see if I can come up with any constructive feedback. [quote]the eternal dream[/quote] The title seems ...

Hm... I like this overall, but for some reason the line "die final death" really annoyed me. It just seems like weak language and it didn't really go with the ...

You pretty much blew me away with this. I mean, sure, it was perhaps a little longer than necessary, but it was beautiful, it had some of the most powerful ...

You tell a good story here, with a lot of emotion, which is good. However, sometimes your rhyme is either inconsistent or forced. I suggest that you either fix the ...

Hmm. This is nice, it flowed very well and has some pretty imagery. However, quite a few phrases and images seemed cliche to me. My advice is to go through ...

Wow. I love the darkness, I love the imagery, I love the alliteration, rhyme and rhythm, I love the morbid beauty. *triple thumbs up* However, the only thing is, I ...

Hello dahling, sorry I've neglected this. I second Hannah's comments on the first stanza. The opening line threw me off. I also thought the word "high" in L5 seemed a ...

This has me on the verge of tears. But that's a personal thing... I think this shook me up too much for me to give it a very constructive critique. ...

Hmm... I liked the theme of this but it didn't really do a whole lot for me. I couldn't really feel your fear and anxiety and nausea and whatever else ...

Yay RENT! I'm not a huge Romance fan, but I do like sad, sweet stories. This was a bit fluffy and predictable,but fairly well-written and a fun read. My biggest ...

Ooh, it confused me initially, but I love the words in bold and the swap of "red" and "read". Very e. e. cummings. I'm afraid this is going to be ...