well when i saw the title, i didnt know what to expect - i
thought maybe i should ignore it and pass on or something...
(as you may realise, i dont like sappy stuff...)
BUT THIS was not sappy! i havent read all of your work
but this was just beautiful without being mushy or anything
and i cant believe you thought it was!!!
only improvement i can see would be to add some more
punctuation - you dont have any question marks and not
enough commas... i know i prob dont always have enough
either but i'd like to know whether that was supposed to be
part of the effect or whether you just didnt put any in...
btw, what does the word 'segue' mean?... not wanting to
sound stupid or anythin but i guess thats the reason we're all
here - to learn from each other...
if you dont mind, i might print this off and show my friends
cause this is an amazing poem and you should be proud of
it! i just hope all of your stuff is this good!!!
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