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Back Alley Sutra

by zalarus


to Molly

well, now you're gone, with your peace and glorious words
and i can't help but think of you in this cold and uninviting place
like a dog out in the rain, broken and wearied by life and whips,
left to my own devices, i go to chinatown and read these words aloud
in an alleyway in some dark and forsaken, forgotten corner in the city,
to the bums that run half-naked and free in the streets
with piss-stained clothes and bright victorious smiles
to the rats in the sewers and subways, blow-torched and abandoned
by their suave & princely men, untouched by the apocalyptic curses
and the strippers underneath the skylight, lonely and sobbing
to the crackheads & whores of Clinton and Ohio
wandering there out on the streets, with their burnt lips
and desperate eyes seeking redemption
in one form or another.
to the disenfranchised young boys & girls of America
hard migrant workers being fucked in the ass by enterprise and
capitalistic corporate entities and heavy-handed governments eager
to seize the fisheries and rice farmers of Thailand and
Pakistani lawyers rioting in the streets of Karachi
to the Chinamen back in so called communist home
they haven't got a chance before the grinning madness of Hades
and Persephone, beautiful Persephone, drinking babies milk
out of a wooden, splintered bottle
waiting for the dope smoke to sink into their flesh
smoking dope and meth copiously and unforgivingly
to the blacked out names on the CIA checklist
waiting for their chance at freedom from the bureaucracy and
heroin-high and tattered and cloud-eyed, sat up and shouted
their names to the twilight sky and fell down from the ten-story roof
Death coming at ten meters per second,
yet still unfazed and discordant yelping
until their skulls are smashed on the pavement
and the streets run with the warm blood of the beatific vision
so it's not strange that i dedicate this to your smiling and unshaken face,
because we're strangers alike, and we see from the same pair of beer-goggle eyes
unconquered by the honest knowledge that has left us both wanting more but
scared of the ultimate & inevitable failure inherent in all of us
but don't be scared of what's to come, seraphim love
let's just ride down this winding road together and take things as they come
until we reach the end, my dearest friend


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Sat Feb 14, 2009 11:47 pm
zalarus says...



thanks for the criticism. the poetry of Allen Ginsberg really inspired this, particularly the poems Kaddish and Howl. anyone who liked this one should check him out. several of his poems are free online. he was part of the Beat movement of the 1950s, and sort of predicted and inspired the hippie movement. but thankee for the quick response to the poem. i do love me some ego boostage.




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Sat Feb 14, 2009 11:13 pm
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You pretty much blew me away with this. I mean, sure, it was perhaps a little longer than necessary, but it was beautiful, it had some of the most powerful imagery I've ever encountered. I loved the way you juxtaposed between images of beauty and images of coarse ugliness. That contrast was brilliant. Kudos.




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Fri Feb 13, 2009 11:29 pm
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Okay. First, gold star. Because this was brilliant. I personally find it difficult to incorporate ideas such as the ones here into poetry but you put it so simply and so effectively. This poem also flowed flawlessly.

The end got me thinking. There was something hopeless about it. Going down a winding road and taking things as they come. I'm not sure if you really meant the hopelessness of the situation of the world and that nothing we do can counter the culture of dishonesty everywhere or if you meant another thing. Like a description of the passivity of people regarding the problems of the world.

Small nitpick.XD

well, now you're gone, with your peace and glorious words
and i can't help but think of you in this cold and uninviting place
like a dog out in the rain, broken and wearied by life and whips, (change this comma to a period. you speak in 2nd person here then shift to first person in the next line it gets confusing.)
left to my own devices, i go to chinatown and read these words aloud




Anyway, great poem. Keep writing.:)





Anxiety is the dizziness of freedom.
— Søren Kierkegaard