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  • Poetry » General, General
    Re: The Bouncy Castle

    Hello! Sis here to give you a review! Just a warning, I'm going to me more critical than EmeraldEyes was of your poem... So, you say that this is a ...

    Jul 10, 2014

  • Poetry » Realistic, General
    Re: Strangled Words

    Hey again Renard!! First of all, nicely done. This is a really good poem. Short and sweet. Okay, so the first thing I noticed while reading was that it could ...

    Jul 1, 2014

  • Poetry » Realistic, Teen Fiction
    Re: Dressed In Wine

    Wow! Beautiful poem! Rhyme. You changed the rhyming pattern in the fifth stanza. You had been using ABCB. But in the fifth stanza you changed to ABCC. Perhaps intentionally. If ...

    Jul 1, 2014

  • Poetry » General, General
    Re: Clockwork

    Wow. This poem is powerful. Nicely done. Okay, so on with the review. Hmmm, probably the only thing I didn't necessarily like was, Your body walked with such precision that ...

    Jul 1, 2014

  • Poetry » Narrative, Realistic
    Re: On Being Content with Only Scraping the Sky

    Hello!! I'm here with a review, just for you!! First of all, this might be more of a pet peeve, but I noticed how you capitalized the beginning of the ...

    Jul 1, 2014

  • Novel / Chapter » Literature, Dramatic
    Re: Revolution - Chapter 3

    Wow! Lots of time skipped. I'm baack!! 1 month later.... Haha okay here we go! Hmmmm, Luke's character is...interesting. So he really cares about Aaron enough to scare everyone because ...

    Jul 1, 2014

  • Novel / Chapter » Literature, Dramatic
    Re: Revolution - Chapter 2

    I will admit, I'm no expert on novels, but I'm here for here we go! First off, this sentence: Luke has placed an ice pack on his brothers head where ...

    Jul 1, 2014

  • Poetry » Narrative, Mystery / Suspense
    Re: Lady of the Lake

    Hey! I've wanted to review this poem since I read it so I thought, "Review Day!!!" I'm not sure if I've reviewed a poem of yours before, so I don't ...

    Jun 29, 2014

  • Short Story » Action / Adventure, Fanfiction
    Re: The Blood Bath

    Sis here, as promised. I'm going to jump right in to criticism (sorry) because we don't have a lot of time. Okay, so first off. Your opening. I was strolling ...

    Jun 1, 2014

  • Poetry » Dramatic, Romantic
    Re: Her and Her Alone

    Hey niteowl! Sis here for a review! I don't remember if I've reviewed any of your poems before, so I'll explain how I do this. Pros and cons, my favorite ...

    May 15, 2014

  • Poetry » General, Other
    Re: Which way do I go?

    Hey! Sis here! I'm not going to go with my usual poem reviewing format, mainly because I'm tired as heck right now... Okay, so first off this was good. But ...

    May 2, 2014

  • Poetry » Dramatic, Dramatic
    Re: The Broken Child

    Hey Lylas! I'm here, as promised! Okay, so since I've never reviewed any poem of yours before I'll tell you how I do this. I'm going to write down a ...

    Apr 26, 2014

  • Poetry » General, General
    Re: That Bitch

    Hey Hadj!! Okay, so since I've never reviewed any poem of yours before I'll tell you how I do this. I'm going to write down a list of pros and ...

    Apr 26, 2014

  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General
    Re: The Stars in Her Eyes - Chapter 1 Part 2

    You just want to make me beg for more, don't you? So, who is this mysterious group...what's IP with this prophecy? Questions, questions!! Loving the way you are writing this! ...

    Apr 4, 2014

  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General
    Re: The Stars in Her Eyes - Chapter 1 Part 1

    Hey Noelle! This is amazing! I love how you wrote this story! Okay, as for nitpicks go, I'm not going to bother repeating everything that Birkhoff said...It'll take up too ...

    Apr 2, 2014


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