Emerson

A code... what? XD Hm, wasn't so bad. Though I already know they'll probably go, "Oh, oh, why were you in the room? You did it to him!" Or maybe ...

Certainly didn't make me feel like I had just read an erotica... If I am correct in guessing what you were talking about at the beginning? You do some repetition ...

I don't normally read fanfiction, but as far as I know, even fan fiction should have a well structured plot so... instead of having Luke just rant and cry and ...

I didn't read it but just some notes: Please, space out your paragraphs to make it easier to read. And, you may not want to post all of this at ...

Ah, so now I can expand my thoughts! It's cute, and does work well as poetry. I always ask for more than a story in poetry, and then when I ...

The emotions worked in this ^_~ Her eyes filled with hate. Hate from everything that she had ever gone through with Richard, and with her family. At that moment, every ...

Ah, it wasn't so bad ^_^ And I do not recognize the last stanza as being from anywhere. It read beautifully. Really the only complaint I can make is that ...

Maybe death will be happy Maybe death will feel sad Maybe death will feel crappy Maybe death will get mad Maybe he’ll be overjoyed Maybe he’ll get annoyed Maybe death ...

Hm. I started reading it, but then I couldn't finish it :roll: I'm so difficult. Punctuate it. Usually I can read and make it through the lack of punctuation, but ...

I like the message behind the poem but I feel like it is a message that has been told in so many different ways, and so many times, that it ...

Punctuate, please? Poetry & Punctuation Try writing the poem so that I can relate and feel what you feel. Also, write about an actual event. Sometimes you can write about ...

“Only losers suck their thumbs,” he teased. since this is a memory... yes? I think you should say "He had teased" because I thought this was actually part of the ...

The punctuation feels really odd, and the fact that the lines are so short makes it really jumpy, it just doesn't flow. At the end, I'm left thinking, "What was ...

I've always thought it curious the way one could still love the man who abuses you, it's such a contradicting feeling. Your poems always leave room for me wanting more. ...

This is spaced oddly, you can keep all the lines together [without space between them] and it is still correct. Interesting topic, it comes off beautifully, but there isn't much ...