Emerson

I managed to sit still today, for a while to o . It 's just a matter of scratching them. This was cute, but in a real "scatter brained" sort ...

Sure, I’ll see you soon.” Amber hung up, some things never changed. “Goodbye,” Jamie said with a small smile. I really liked this, because it pulled you back to the ...

My hand was itching [s]really badly,[/s] where my temporary tattoo of a seven with Harry Potter’s face in it was. People starting screaming and running around. the verb should be ...

Sabradan's dialog being in italics makes it really annoying to read, I have to say. I can guess that you did it like that because, in real life, he would ...

the thought of Alyssa [s]laying[/s] lying in the room behind her came back into focus. he fell, the image of showering sparks burned into her retinas. The house fell into ...

I didn't read chapter one but... I don't feel like I need to to critique this anyway. I'm with Magic Man, it needs more. But in this little bit, I ...

I liked the wording and idea behind this but somethings I have problems with. Draw in deep the summer, late night. This didn't make sense to me. the artificial sweet ...

Hmmm It wasn't that bad for your first poem, but there were some major things that, once cleaned up, could make this a lot nicer. I'm feeling rather lazy, so ...

Kitty caught the typos. Hm, I liked how the ending was meant to be some giant sensory image, but it didn't work too well. The rest of the poem went ...

Anything in red is an addition. “The question is,” Director Mark Clevenger said comma pacing at the head of the conference table, tie loosened and sleeves rolled up passed thick ...

I paused to catch my breath, at the speed she was going, she was long gone by now. This sentence is weird. I left the crumpled papers next to my ...

I would nit pick this and fix all your spelling errors and grammar problems and all, but since I have a problem with the whole section, I won't. All of ...

“I know you can do better than this! Strike me!” A man exclaims forcefully as his hands move smoothly, effortlessly over a young woman’s strikes, manipulating them to his will. ...

*squee* Wow. That was beautiful. I kind of wish it had more meaning behind it, or maybe it doesn't and I just don't see it? I'll have to sit and ...

oh, brad liked the poem? Props for Marenka! I really liked it, but honestly I didn't know and wasn't sure it was about abuse until the little message =/ How ...