Emerson

I can't think up what good things to say. Perhaps the idea was too abstract, or maybe the way it was told was clunky, or maybe it is just too ...

Hmm....I think it shows promise. You're trying for something beautiful, I can read it in how you try to word things. But, Rieda hit the nail on the head when ...

I'm very confused.. JC hit the nail on the head; this isn't fiction. Should I move it? I don't know your intention. There just isn't enough to this to make ...

Hm. It was overly simplistic for me, and I couldn't feel anything from it. It didn't take use of imagery either. I think I've read too many poems about the ...

Yoi. Well, first off your sentences were overly simple, as was the rhyme scheme. Both those facts smothered it thoroughly. Next off, you navel gazed to the max, which means ...

Oh. It was beautiful ^_^ Quite frankly: I'm not entirely sure what it is about. In the third stanza, I understood more. But I still don't understand it much. I'll ...

This was kind of cute, I suppose. Really the only thing I can comment on [plus, tonight all my critiques seem overly useless, sorry!] is that this is very prose ...

Dunno what dear Fandy-Dandy said, but listen to her. The problem with these is that I can't get into them and I can't feel. Try using more imagery and sensory ...

Hum. I'm not sure what to say. I guess it interested me, but only with the fact that I guessed what was happening, because I didn't get it, and my ...

Oh my... Do I critique this, or clap? The first poem ever written for me, yay! Some parts I can pick up on--like the fact that I have a chick ...

huh. Well seeing that all of my favorite poetry critics have already hit this, I probably won't say a lot they haven't. Punctuation, please. Poetry & Punctuation Also, this article ...

"Kyle?" Jon asked, returning to the patient file. "No Dr. Lylac?" That confused me... Uh, I have to say that this whole thing confused me and I really don't know ...

Oh, hum, well first, punctuation. Please. I think my eyes are going to fall out from that >< Poetry & Punctuation . Okay, now this may be better with punctuation, ...

Then there are times like these, when the world throws cards at you. er... this didn't make much sense to me. I think I know which phrase you were trying ...

I think "Ignore, Please" fits the jumpy tone of the poem. I know I gushed all over you in the PM but now I'm just going to re-ramble about it ...