This is a confusing piece.. But for your first attempt, well done. I am in the beginner stages still and I can't give much advice or help [How useful am I?!] but I liked this, once I read it over again.
I took it to be about how, as humans, we know nothing about what's "out there" and that we cannot predict what will happen.
I liked this, very mysterious, but I think some work could be done to it to make it flow easier and also make the imagary better.
Good work though. =]
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