Emerson

Hmmm I'm not sure what I think of adding stanzas or not. I'm more concerned about the content. Love poems, or any emotional poem, is really, really hard to write. ...

Ah, Jasmin pointed out some good things. Word choice is very important when you are trying to make the reader feel, so read over and consider how you can make ...

I liked this ^_^ Kelly's explanation about the couplet helped, as well, otherwise I was left thinking, "Uhm, what?" I loved the imagery. I'm guess Donne is some author that ...

You don't need all that spacing between each line, that's improper formating. You only need a line break (where there is a space) between stanzas. You have no punctuation! Ack. ...

Uhm, yes. I'm not sure if you were being serious either. What I believe Pol was trying to say about the rhyming is that it's too forced, and too obvious. ...

Yoi, as always I struggle to comprehend what exactly you are saying. I liked S3, I can say that. Not sure why, but I do. Otherwise, I can't say a ...

They gave me these pieces of paper to write on . As soon as I came in to this windowless grey room I saw an overused chair and a desk ...

Je rentre! My brain could understand this, yay! I loved the visuals. I love it! ring pretty red around my head I like the rhyming between "red" and "head" here. ...

Eh. I'm not entirely sure I'll continue reading this. Sure, it may pick up in a few pieces and you'll probably drive me up a wall until I read it, ...

Huh. I'm not sure how to critique this as a poem. It didn't have much of a poetic format to it, and it kind of seemed like a stream of ...

You still have the same typos in the beginning: My father was not supposed to cry, you can 't be mad at somebody who’s crying. You can ' t hate ...

Everything said above is all good. This reminds me of something I might get in a chain letter, or something, you know? It's cute, it rhymes, it doesn't have too ...

I'm glad Colly was here to catch all of that, because I didn't feel like it XD But she's completely right, the rhythm and rhyming fell apart in a few ...

The one [s]who's[/s] who'd hold me close. I liked the rhyme scheme, but I think that s3 was clunky, like Lu Marielle, it's the last line. The problem with this ...

First of all, stop abusing punctuation! It is an important part of all poetry. Poetry & Punctuation . In the second poem, "mere human who" sounded very odd, and use ...