Emerson

Red things are either comments, something I've changed, or something I've added. “Then what’s this argument about?” Evelyn crossed her arms and leaned back as her mother struggled to remember ...

A five shot Remington with pump action and a plastic magazine is my only companion in these halls. These concourses of rejection - Ad nauseum. Barrels the size of quarters ...

the lipsticks’ smeared on the pig; The apostrophe in this line seems unneeded? Unless I am missing something... I'm not really sure what I think of this--because I'm not entirely ...

First, I'm going to move this to the fiction section, because that is where writing goes. ^^ As to the critique, this is really too short for us to give ...

hmmm I think the longer lines in S2 (L6 and L8) should be broken up--it's just odd to read short lines, than long lines. I think "Dr" in the last ...

This was OK. I don't like it because I feel like it's a real cheat off of The Raven with "[for] evermore" and "nevermore". You'll really want to change those ...

The penmanship of other languages is kind of fancy. the use of "kind of" makes this a really weak sentence. As an essay, this is OK. You seem to just ...

For a poem with such a strong meaning behind it, this could potentially be something that makes the reader burst into tears. It's a great idea, but just needs to ...

The largest problem I have is the lack of poetry. It's an interesting concept, but it needs more. On my first read, I didn't understand the idea behind it, and ...

Same smells still linger here, do you mean smell, as in the singular? If you want it plural, your tense is all off... This poem was... a little bit below ...

Hehe, you pull of navel gazing in a superb way, Sureal. I loved the allusion to Genesis, and the way the self centeredness was really a hiding place, almost. Or ...

hmmm on one hand this reminds me of some lyrics from a band I know. On the other, it doesn't work quite well as poetry. First off, on your stanzas: ...

I'm not entirely sure I liked this. I never have liked poems about writing or writing like subjects, you have to be really good to pull them off. They end ...

Aye. This isn't a story, and I'm pretty sure you're not looking for a critique. You have one of two options: 1) Make it longer and post it as an ...

Do not repost things in other sections because they were locked by a moderator or an administrator. I know that Nate gave you reasons why you shouldn't have posted it ...