Emerson

Oh my gosh, this is amazing. I really have no complaints what so ever; when I'm working on Death Machine , can you send me some magical editing dust? For ...

I think this is a really good start for a poem, but it needs a lot more to it. It's poetic, so I certainly think you have a good base ...

I've already said it, but please critique two things when you post one, and don't flood the forums with your own work. ^_^ This is just a poem about preaching ...

Before I get into the critique, welcome to YWS! I know you're new, so perhaps you haven't looked over the rules yet? It's suggested that you critique two things before ...

Maybe it was her time, maybe it was fiat. Fiat? Though it is a word I do think you meant to say fate. and the last two sounds u heard ...

I think I understand it but at the same time I am not entirely sure... and that is why I can't exactly say I like this poem. It was pretty, ...

Well, Via already caught onto the annoying repetition... in poetry, repetition should be used (or it is taught to be used for) giving meaning and enphasis to something, rather than ...

This is interesting but... I am not so sure I like it. It's kind of hard for me to grasp at what you were trying to write about. War, I ...

I'm not going to have much to say on this, haha. I love the music held behind this; and how it is easy to see that it could only be ...

This is a really interesting song idea, since it is rather unique. As you know, I'm not much on song lyrics, but I'll still give you my thoughts. ^_^ I ...

You captured the setting true, but what are you trying to say to me, the reader? I didn't like it much, perhaps because you're just showing us a setting, and ...

I think you could have a whole lot more imagery. If you're talking about the sun, there is so much to show the reader; and I didn't see a whole ...

This seems to have the exact same problem as the other poem I read by you. It makes no sense and I cannot discern what you are talking about. I ...

Oh, what am I to say? Well, first, this isn't a story. I am sorry to break your heart. A story consists of a beginning, a middle, and an end. ...

It's hard to say what you think about a poem when you can't understand it. Your poem seems to have beauty, but I can't really tell. I can't understand it. ...