Emerson

and break the spelll; You have two Ls in the word "spell" here. This is beautiful. I love your metaphors, and you have such a mastery of language. You always ...

a 9/10 doesn't seem like falling short, haha. I think you need to also mention that this was a play. That changes the context of it... I loved The Doll ...

But, a cruse, this love could never be Cruse->curse? The way your fingers graze your skin. The way your fingers graze your[my?] skin what ? This is an incomplete sentence. ...

I'm not sure if you had no punctuation intentionally or not. It looked like you meant to do it that way, but it still makes no sense to me. I ...

I'm incredebly torn with this. It was well written, that I can't entirely deny...But why not give us more ? It's just a paragraph. I don't know who she is, ...

That's what Will does to me every time I look at him. This seems like a really wrong place to start. It's like you forgot several paragraphs before hand. What ...

Heheh, that is really interesting! You have a great idea to start with, but it has just a few issues. Your rhyme scheme makes reading the poem a bit jarring--it ...

It's late, and my glasses aren't on. Letters are blurring together, but it is still beautiful. ^_^ Your imagery, metaphor, and silly, ridiculous images all keep this poem right in ...

Listen to Camille (Ayra) she's a smart one! First off, you need to know that there is a big difference between poetry and journal writing/blog posts. like Camille said: why ...

I thynk u shld tak lyke a normyl prsn. Yeah? This is a writing site, please use real English. I also suggest you crack a collection of poems and read ...

You have an amazing mastery of metaphor (I love the boiling sun most of all) but your stanzas have a huge issue. One does not flow into the other, and ...

Cal was the best because he personified one of the stronger themes of the story... I have to read this for AP lit over the summer, and I hated it ...

This is good but I still have something against it: you are rewriting one of the oldest clichés. Why dig it up from its rotty grave? Why not make your ...

It's cute. But that is about as far as it goes. This is good if you want to give it to your fellow (I'm sure he will be charmed ^_^) ...

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