Emerson

Hey there! Deafwriter has some wonderful advice, so I'd suggest keeping up with what he's said. You have a great beginning for a poem here, lots of potential emotions you ...

Hello there! As a slight note, I believe Russian roulette is actually played with a single bullet, rather than one bullet not being used. I hope this isn't too rough ...

Hey there Morgan! Good to see you around the forums. So I see you just joined today. Why not introduce yourself in the welcome section? Also, keep in mind we ...

Hey there Biffle! So the general premise behind this poem is awesome and I love some of the language you have in it. "now, you're pale, as white as a ...

Hi there! This might seem silly, but the fact that this poem doesn't have a title is a big indication that the poem itself needs a lot more work on ...

I am more than happy to be here, reading one of your poems! And aren't I satisfied. This is a beautiful artwork, as you always give. As the others said, ...

Hello there! It looks like you haven't made any reviews yet. Not to entirely get on your case, but you should review some stuff! It's fairly easy, and it's only ...

Hey there! I have to agree with Megan, this seems more like a rap song, but not because you shorten the words, like "cuz" (anyone can do anything in poetry, ...

So I positively love the irony in headless wisdom, being that the brain is in the head and so all intelligence is considered to be in the head... put you ...

Hi there! I really like that you use the idea of a tornado to represent your speakers emotions. It's real unique, and angry, and a great visual cue for the ...

Hey there! Being that I'm still in the middle of getting over a rough breakup, I can really relate to this poem. It's a real toughy, that's for sure. What ...

Hiya there! So since this says "scene 1" I'm going to assume this is the beginning of the movie, or TV show, or whatever it is intended to be. Like ...

The imagery in this poem is epic. End of sentence. Major props for that. I love, love the first stanza. It flows wonderfully and makes me think of something Whitman ...

Hello there! This poem has a very heavy topic to it, but what you've done with it, it only touches the surface. You cover sadness, love, cutting, bullying. So there's ...

Hi darling! She found herself on a far western shore, with the ocean before her; like a giant that pretends to slumber, until it wishes to ravish the town. So ...