Emerson

The try/cry/lie/die rhyming got a little wearisome in the fourth line. But, despite that, I think your fourth and fifth line go together well. I'm not entirely sure what the ...

Wow, I really love this! The voice you used made it very beautiful. I think some lines could be changed, some grammar/punctuation could be fixed up. Otherwise, C'est bon :-) ...

Eh, I didn't get through all of it, honestly. I couldn't connect with it, it was just a continuous flow and didn't seem very poetic, IMHO. It was emotional, but ...

er... No, I didn't read it. But with good reason, I'll explain. 1. I don't like long poetry. But there is an explanation behind this. I don't like long poetry ...

It's a good idea for a poem, but the poem its self could use some fixing up. It had a slow pace, it felt bogged down my too many words, ...

All but the last stanza was good. You had a rhyming pattern, and then it went out the window. The meaning behind it is great, though not original, but you ...

I like the general theme of the poem, and it was well written and understandable up until the line "Ill [which I assume is 'I'll'?] give my eye to protect ...

This was really interesting, and I absolutely loved the voice you used. They will b – r – e – a – k —— o o z e— Why did ...

Maybe you and Ariel could come visit when you go on vacation or something. eh? his voice broke a little at this point and he stopped to clear his through ...

Have you had problems insulting yourself before? Really, there it no need. The idea of using the alphabet to structure a poem is intriguing, I'm not sure I've seen it ...

3. Members are asked to withold on submitting work until they post two reviews. After one has done, a member can submit as much work as he/she may like, although ...

I think I like this more than Ch, in fact I certainly did until the "It was tall and hairy. Its arms and legs bulged with veins, its snout wrinkled. ...

We should eventually create a section specifically for teen-based poetry... Not original, to say the least, but wasn't entirely horrible either, so that is good. You have almost an entire ...

The man [comma] seemingly [s]enamoured[/s] enamored by the program [comma] was nervously tapping the side of the chair, drumming out an uneven rhythm. The action movie before him reached a ...

and lightly tipped over the open wound. tipped it over...? water streaming down his face. water=tears? if so, say tears. it sounds weird. Why had chosen to stay home this ...