Emerson

I have to admit that the majority of this does not make sense to me. Now whether this is because the way it is written or because I'm poor at ...

It's so troubling to see Kyle so near, so close. I feel like Jon (Which makes you amazing with skillz!) and every time Kyle hugs or touches Jon, I can ...

eeee. I love Pros ^_^ I really cannot wait to have a nice fun hard back copy in my lap for me to stay up all night with as I ...

I'm finally here! something small and familiarly shaped in their hand. you could also just say "familiar" and cut the whole -ly adjective thing. Eh, Sorry to ruin it for ...

As the wind strums a soft beautiful song. there should be a comma after "soft" to separate the adjectives. You have a pattern of ending the lines with a comma, ...

ummm...You know I'm really tempted to move this, but I won't. You shouldn't post too little, this give the critic nothing to talk about, like this. Although I can say, ...

I think you meant to post this (And the others you posted) in the Lyrics Section . "Lyric poetry expresses the wishes, the hopes, the joys, and the sorrows of ...

First off, I'd like to say, you shouldn't have to tell us what POV you are in you should be able to write it in such a way that we ...

I've read this. It was pretty good, but I really hate to burst your bubble: Go Ask Alice was originally promoted as nonfiction and was published under the byline "Anonymous." ...

Those aren't exactly haikus, though. I'll quote what a dear friend of mine said in response to my own humorous "haiku" as I thought it were. Technically, this is not ...

I'm not in the mood for critique If you don't want a critique, then why even post? Don't yell at Chandni for what she said, Critiques are opinions.... I think ...

lol I found no problem with "down or up to climax" I'm so tempted to place commas and periods and the like in all these places, but it is so ...

I suppose PG-13 is sufficient for one F word... any more and I'd so kick it to R. /mod rant I resisted the strong urge to shrug off the pale, ...

You didn't suck. Ofour gave amazing constructive criticism. I have the exact same things to say as him. So if you're looking for something more constructive, go up and read ...

"till" isn't a word, it's until. Capitalize your "I"s as well. It was OK, nothing grand or magical. Your sentence didn't really make sense, except for the last one, which ...